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Okay,here's something I wrote.It's not done though..Could you guys give your opinion?

Live Again
I'm damn tired of this depression
Being this upset ,always
Is just a wasting of my time
So your gone and everything is so confusing
Just wanna fit into my own skin
But I'm so lonely,
Don't even wanna be with myself anymore
People are thinking
I'm mad at the world
But nothing's wrong with it,though
It's just me
Time to give this up
It don't make no sense
Gotta feel like I did before
So life sucks
Never cared to much before
Livin' life best I could
Was the happiest time
That could be-for me
(Chorus)
Guess what?
It's time to live again
Guess what?
It's just a shell of what once was
Guess what?
It could be again
All you have to do is live again.

I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
There are people,but they are not real
They speak for hours,yet don't say a word
Their lives are right here yet they have no life
They're isolated,yet connected to all
We're always in this place, but not really there at all
All we see is a blinding light, we never hear a call
What am I to do
When I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
Left with a pain that is all but bliss.

This is really good. Is it a song or a pome. Either way, may I use it on my site? I got my poetry section up and this would be really good on it.

I give it an A+. :)

Bow to the queen vampire of all!!! Wa ha ha!

Well,it was supossed to be a song,but I can't think of anything else it.So I'll just end it there and call it a poem.Sure,you could use it on your site,Moonbeam!Just take out the line that says Chorus.Thanks for the A+ Moonbeam!

I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
There are people,but they are not real
They speak for hours,yet don't say a word
Their lives are right here yet they have no life
They're isolated,yet connected to all
We're always in this place, but not really there at all
All we see is a blinding light, we never hear a call
What am I to do
When I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
Left with a pain that is all but bliss.

A+ :P

Blank space is good :)

A big A on your paper... is there even a paper to write on?

*Hands Sakura some college ruled paper

Blank space is good :)

Thanks... By the way, I just finished that darn oral presentation... I was alone and almost no one was here (I had to go early in the morning to do it, also known as recuperation)... So I wasen't shy at all.

Moonbeam,if it is possible could you put aka Ariel Nichols somewhere around my poem?I don't want it to be stolen.

I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
There are people,but they are not real
They speak for hours,yet don't say a word
Their lives are right here yet they have no life
They're isolated,yet connected to all
We're always in this place, but not really there at all
All we see is a blinding light, we never hear a call
What am I to do
When I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
Left with a pain that is all but bliss.

It's a nice poem/song.

I like it LLS, it's like a depression of life but it's saying how to come out of the depression. I give it an A+

Drék the master of evil, becuase evil is good but not good good but makes me feel good

This is like a poem of hope.

I'm glad you all liked it.

I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
There are people,but they are not real
They speak for hours,yet don't say a word
Their lives are right here yet they have no life
They're isolated,yet connected to all
We're always in this place, but not really there at all
All we see is a blinding light, we never hear a call
What am I to do
When I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
Left with a pain that is all but bliss.

Be glad! It's good!

I loved it, you should make more as poetry can make you think alot about problems in your life.

Drék the master of evil, becuase evil is good but not good good but makes me feel good

They should set this up on a website.

Ya something like dark poetry for the soul, cause it makes you think about life and death.

Drék the master of evil, becuase evil is good but not good good but makes me feel good

Please Don't turn into one of the goth kids.

Link Kick Ass! Kill Them All! Ha Ha Ha!

It's not meant to be dark.Just meaningful.

I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
There are people,but they are not real
They speak for hours,yet don't say a word
Their lives are right here yet they have no life
They're isolated,yet connected to all
We're always in this place, but not really there at all
All we see is a blinding light, we never hear a call
What am I to do
When I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
Left with a pain that is all but bliss.

I said it was about hope... It's nothing dark really.
Things that are dark are things that speaks about demons, evils and such.

I really like it!
*Puts 2 +'s after all the a's in the song*
I hope that gives an idea of how much I like it!

I know how to say antidisestablishmentarianism.

Meh I think it's dark but anyways gives LLS 3 rupees in a hat for performing the amazing poem. (You know like when people play music on the streets)

Drék the master of evil, becuase evil is good but not good good but makes me feel good

I don't read those kind of things, but I'll take everyone's opinion and play along, it's no doubt good anyways.

Go Protoman, and Link, and Zero, and Roll, and Shadic(who likes AOL)!

Drék: Street preformers are called buskers. Don't ask me why I know this. It's just one of the many facts in "Dan's Helmet of Knowledge™"

Thanks but thats a messed name.

Anyways Dan aren't you from Talon's old school?

Drék the master of evil, becuase evil is good but not good good but makes me feel good

Yes he is, you two can go have a discussion in the Megaman ZeroX topic, I give permission.
Danny is actually smarter than you or me Drék, but stupider too, I'll explain tomorrow.
On topic, I'm saying now that just because you made it it's good.

Go Protoman, and Link, and Zero, and Roll, and Shadic(who likes AOL)!

Thanks everyone!(Again...)
Anyway Talon why don't you read it for the heck of it?

I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
There are people,but they are not real
They speak for hours,yet don't say a word
Their lives are right here yet they have no life
They're isolated,yet connected to all
We're always in this place, but not really there at all
All we see is a blinding light, we never hear a call
What am I to do
When I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
Left with a pain that is all but bliss.

Okay it's good, but I kind of find it boring (Remember, I'm not a fan of music with words, just instrumental). I hope I'm not offending you in anyways whatsoever, I'm just stating my opinion, maybe if you could play an instrument or two along side with it, it'll sound better.

Go Protoman, and Link, and Zero, and Roll, and Shadic(who likes AOL)!

My latest piece which I wrote in class today,your the first ones to see it!It's shorter than I usually write,but it's to the point.

It's almost as if I decided to give up
On my studies and who knows what else.
I can't even concentrate anymore
It's like my mind is telling me:
I need to relax,
I need to have fun like everyone else
I just wish I could feel like myself again..
But so many things have changed
And I feel like I'm stuck in the way
Things used to be..

I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
There are people,but they are not real
They speak for hours,yet don't say a word
Their lives are right here yet they have no life
They're isolated,yet connected to all
We're always in this place, but not really there at all
All we see is a blinding light, we never hear a call
What am I to do
When I'm stuck in a world that does not exist
Left with a pain that is all but bliss.

Wow, sounds just like how I feel now. I like it personaly. It's very much like the stuff people read at the cool little coffee houses in the city.

Bow to the queen vampire of all!!! Wa ha ha!

I love them both,Link's lost sword!
It seems you are getting much better at writing, maybe what Mrs.Thiel predicted in your yearbook is coming true?
You just keep putting your emotions into your poetry,these are much better than "The Outcast".
But that started it all I guess.

Cool!